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Written with a pen
Sealed with a kiss
This is one letter
I hope to God you won't miss
It's just me
Advertising...me
A simple prayer of redemption (SP? wait, is this even a word?)
A cry-out for acception (WTF? it says this is spelled wrong?)
After years and years of rejection
The hope has faded
To this clear crystal ball
With you in power
To change it all
Whether you use it for good
Or you use it for bad
All is your choice
All is in your bold sacred voice
I will follow.
So...
Written with a pen
Sealed with a kiss
This is another letter you're sure to miss
©2008-2009 ~princesslisaloo
:iconprincesslisaloo:

Author's Comments

gawd, somebody needs to teach me these weird poetry vocab words cause i'm clueless. seriously, what's a good category to put this in? i dun even know!
anyways, i read some dumb chain mail and sorta stole the "written with a pen sealed with a kiss" but i swear, the rest is allllll me!!
;) you like??
cmt/fav/msg whateva you please. i appreciate it all guys, seriously. just a single view is amazing. please give me advice so i can be "poetic" to my full extent!!

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:iconcowgirl4:
You're getting better! There's more smoothness in this one, that's obvious. You should try out different vocabulary to see which word fits better, since some of the vocabulary you used seems a bit awkward with the rest of the poem. A thesaurus usually helps with the vocabulary issue. Other than that, you are getting much better! Good job!

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"Sie will es und so ist est fien
So war es und so wird es immer sein
Sie will es und so ist est Brauch
Was sie will bekommt sie auch"
- "Rosenrot" by Rammstein

If you want a translation, look it up.
:iconprincesslisaloo:
yeey *claps hands like monkey* XD
oh yeh, this was done pretty fast. i dun think i have one at my house *sigh* i shall have to get one...
thank you veryyy much.

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hey, srry to everyone for my late replies, i quit DA for a long time and i'm getting back into the hang of it now.
:iconvetoast:
Maybe it said "acception" is spelled wrong because it's not a word? xD You can find a thesaurus on the internets, simply "thesaurus.com" and there you are! Smoother than your past ones, I do admit, and I love the messages you're portraying with your poetry. It all sounds much like my early poetry, in fact :] <3 Awesome work.

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I love your light,
vetoast.
:iconcowgirl4:
You're very welcome, hun! :hug:

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"Sie will es und so ist est fien
So war es und so wird es immer sein
Sie will es und so ist est Brauch
Was sie will bekommt sie auch"
- "Rosenrot" by Rammstein

If you want a translation, look it up.
:iconprincesslisaloo:
really? i seriously thought acception was a word...yeh, i know, someone else said that. but not the website..i shall check that out...apparently i seriously improved on this even though it was done in like 5 mins ^^ thank you very much. oh well thank you soooo much. i love getting advice ;)

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hey, srry to everyone for my late replies, i quit DA for a long time and i'm getting back into the hang of it now.
:iconprincesslisaloo:
i guess everyone realy likes this one <333 i'm so happy.

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hey, srry to everyone for my late replies, i quit DA for a long time and i'm getting back into the hang of it now.
:iconcowgirl4:
Good!

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"Sie will es und so ist est fien
So war es und so wird es immer sein
Sie will es und so ist est Brauch
Was sie will bekommt sie auch"
- "Rosenrot" by Rammstein

If you want a translation, look it up.
:iconcowgirl4:
That's great!

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"Sie will es und so ist est fien
So war es und so wird es immer sein
Sie will es und so ist est Brauch
Was sie will bekommt sie auch"
- "Rosenrot" by Rammstein

If you want a translation, look it up.
:iconprincesslisaloo:
yeh, not so happy anymore. isn't it weird how one person's opinion can seem like the world's?? do you hate me? do i annoy you??

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hey, srry to everyone for my late replies, i quit DA for a long time and i'm getting back into the hang of it now.

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